Design Visualisation, Project Two, Blog Five

Above is my first draft of my 'Murder' movie clip. After showing it in class today the main feedback I got was that I had humanised or characterised my letters too much, such as the e having an eye with eyelids etc. Also I found that in the part where my e falls unconcious this was generally lost on the audience as it created confusion as when it goes black most people thought that was the end.

So I have made an edit. In my second go I have removed the eye from my e, and in order to show the emotion his eye showed I have attempted to show this by further excentuating the e's movement, such as making it jump+expand when it gets a fright or shrink when it cowers. Another edit I have made is the removal of the e becoming unconcious in order to remove confusion and keep the clip slick and to the point. Now I have the e fall from the u hit the ground but as the lighting flashes white to black you can see the r gradually approaching the e. This will hopefully add to the horror idea which is generally associated with Murder. Then once the e stops he is murdered instantly.

For now I think I am happy with this but in order to gain some more feedback I'm going to upload it up on facebook.